[governance] Reconstituting MAG (Tech/admin language)

[Meryem Marzouki]

Le 20 févr. 08 à 15:24, Suresh Ramasubramanian a écrit :

>> However, their
>> representation should not be at the expense of broader civil society
>> participation.
>
> However, it is essential to ensure broader and more inclusive civil  
> society
> participation
>
> That wording ok?

No, Suresh. It's not OK. You're supposed to understand English better  
than I do, but let me explain to you what's wrong with this:

Ian's sentence ("However, their representation should not be at the  
expense of broader civil society participation") was agreed as a  
replacement to previous sentence ("However, their current over- 
representation should be corrected"). Both sentences were proposed at  
the end of the following paragraph: "We also agree that International  
organizations having an important role in the development of Internet- 
related technical standards and relevant policies should continue to  
be represented in the MAG. <last sentence>."

Even with limited English language skills, anyone would understand  
that "their" refers to the " International organizations having an  
important role in the development of Internet-related technical  
standards and relevant policies", in other words, the so-called  
"technical community". So we're talking about them in this paragraph,  
sot talking about CS participation.

So why trying to entirely change the sense and the coherence of the  
whole paragraph, with a replacement proposal that is, on top of all  
this, nothing but a weaker repetition of the first two paragraphs of  
the statement? Are we kidding here?



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