<html><head></head><body style="word-wrap: break-word; -webkit-nbsp-mode: space; -webkit-line-break: after-white-space; "><div><div>On 27/09/2011, at 5:31 PM, Brett Solomon wrote:</div><br class="Apple-interchange-newline"><blockquote type="cite">Hey Jeremy, Izumi an Wolfgang,<br><br>Great and important initiative which we will sign on to.<br><br>However, I do think, given the nature of the proposal and its direct contravention of the Tunis agenda, the letter is too soft.<br>
<br>eg<br><ul><li>We should make clear who we are - not just a group of NGOs assembled, but some of the world's leading organisations, networks and Xx representing millions of people etc (This is not the right language I know, but let's establish ourselves).</li>
<li>I think we should provide them with the text that should be included in the proposal ie if they have text, they have something to work with.</li><li>I dont know if there are other concerns with the proposal (I haven't seen it - is it worth sending around to the list?) but I wonder if it has sufficient rights language contained in it.</li>
<li>The last line could be strengthened significantly:<i> We express our hope that the UN committee which will deal with the proposed document will take into consideration our concerns. </i>Could be "We express our deep concern about the proposed text and call upon the members to ensure that the current proposal be rejected in its current format." <br>
</li></ul></blockquote></div><div>Thanks for your comments. Attaching the text for your further info (and bcc'ing everyone again).</div></body></html>