<div dir="ltr"><div>Congrats for this steep challenge.<br></div>Here a few comments.<br><br>Surveillance<br><br>“arbitrary or unlawful collection of personal data and surveillance” by States ..<br><br>States can declare lawful whatever they do. Isn't there a recent UN declaration (dec 2013 ?) that could provide some language here.<br>
<br>Internet Infrastructure<br><br>Internet is a network of networks and applications using a diversity of infrastructures, not a singular entity. In this context <i>"unfragmented"</i> is an undefined term without any precise meaning. Suggestion: <i>interoperable</i>.<br>
<div class="gmail_extra">- - -<br><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Fri, Apr 11, 2014 at 10:39 AM, Andrew Puddephatt <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:Andrew@gp-digital.org" target="_blank">Andrew@gp-digital.org</a>></span> wrote:<br>
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<div style="font-size:14px;font-family:Calibri,sans-serif;word-wrap:break-word"><div><div><div>Great work everyone – thanks for putting this together so speedily</div><div><br></div><div><div>Andrew Puddephatt</div><div>
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<span style="font-weight:bold">From: </span> Jeremy Malcolm <<a href="mailto:Jeremy@Malcolm.id.au" target="_blank">Jeremy@Malcolm.id.au</a>><br><span style="font-weight:bold">Reply-To: </span> Jeremy Malcolm <<a href="mailto:Jeremy@Malcolm.id.au" target="_blank">Jeremy@Malcolm.id.au</a>><br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">Date: </span> Friday, 11 April 2014 05:09<br><span style="font-weight:bold">To: </span> "<bestbits@lists. net>" <<a href="mailto:bestbits@lists.bestbits.net" target="_blank">bestbits@lists.bestbits.net</a>><br>
<span style="font-weight:bold">Subject: </span> [bestbits] URGENT - statement commenting on draft NETmundial text to be posted 8.5 hours from now<br></div><div><div class="h5"><div><br></div><div><div style="word-wrap:break-word">
<div>Yesterday the Best Bits participants who are helping to organise the NETmundial civil society pre-meeting on 22 April held a call about the meeting (more on this later), and also, thought not on the agenda, there was consensus that it would be strategically
important to post a short statement about the NETmundial text that was leaked by Wikileaks on Wednesday (<span><a href="https://wikileaks.org/netmundial-outcome/NETmundial-EMC-Outcome-Document.pdf%29" target="_blank">https://wikileaks.org/netmundial-outcome/NETmundial-EMC-Outcome-Document.pdf</a>) </span>in
order to influence the drafting process that is current underway.</div><span></span><div><br></div><div>The statement is generally supportive of the draft but highlights the parts that we consider most important to preserve,<span> particularly considering the points endorsed in previous BestBits submissions</span>.</div>
<div><br></div><div>Unfortunately, <b>the statement has to be released by 8.5 hours from now</b> because that is the next meeting of the Executive Multistakeholder Committee (EMC) at which the draft will be considered again. So with our apologies for the very short notice
and limited opportunity to participate by those who were not on the call, here is a sign-on statement that was composed over the last few hours (into the late night for some):</div><div><br></div><div><a href="http://bestbits.net/netmundial-outcome-comments/" target="_blank">http://bestbits.net/netmundial-outcome-comments/</a></div>
<div><br></div><div>I am also pasting it below. If you would like to endorse it, please make sure that if you do so before 10:30am Brazil time, which is less than 8.5 hours from now. As usual, you can endorse it from the website above, not by replying to this email. The
statement will also be emailed to the Executive Multistakeholder Committee members to ensure that they receive it before their meeting.</div><br></div></div></div></div></span></div></blockquote><div>[snip] <br></div></div>
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